我最愛的運動是棒球,這運動對我來說具有十分的吸引力.我是從小學五年級在一個偶然的機會下見識到棒球對我的吸引力.於是我加入了棒球隊.每天早上,必須很早來練身體.長做的就包括了跑步,伏地挺身等很多在打棒球前不可或缺的熱身.

這些熱身可以大幅的減少運動的傷害.而棒球最講究的就是腳力還有手力了.腳力是在跑壘時不可或缺的一項因素.你可能打的很遠,但是卻不一定跑的很快,這就造成了對方傳球的機會,即可把你封殺掉.即使你打的再遠,除非全壘打,要不然傳球的速度絕對比跑步快上好幾倍.





每當我出去比賽時,總是會享受到打擊到對方的球的快感.看著球從二十公尺 三十公尺 五十公尺的飛阿飛,這種成就感是我對棒球一直熱衷的原因.





最後,上了國中,可以練棒球的機會就少了,因為住的地方的關係.只好假日拿著棒球棍,找石頭打.石頭雖然會讓球棍壞掉,但是看著球棍上的凹洞越來越多,也挺有成就感的.


以上是我的文章 可否請大大看一下 有什麼缺失 或者分段建議等的 另外 也幫忙翻譯成英文一下 我想要比照文法 請不要用翻譯軟體如dr.eye或者線上翻譯謝謝

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好心幫您翻一句好了..."My favorite sports is baseball."
順便給個建議,句型弄簡單一點比較好,自己翻也比較好翻

好 為了表示我的誠意 請大家看一下我翻的文章My favorite sports

My favorite sports is baseball.
It’s so interesting to me.
I play baseball since I’m in elementary school .
When I contact it,I unable to free oneself about it.
So I join the school baseball team.
Every morning, I have to get up early and go to school practice with my friend.
At that time,I have to practice arm physical and muscle endurance.
When ever I go out a match,I always can enjoy the hit out. When I see the ball hit by me and I enjoy the pleasant sensation.
Twenty meters,thiry,fifty.
This achievements is why I always to adore in baseball.
Finally,when I get to junior high school.
I can’t practice all the time just like in elementary school.
Because the environment factor so I have to take the bat and hit rocks.
The rocks might broke my bat,but I practice more and the experience more,too.
Sometimes,the baseball star’s heroic bearing.I also illusion I’ll be the focus of flash lamp.But,they also must to work hard a lot so they can get nowaday’s achievements.

我有改了一些

我最愛的運動是棒球,這運動對我來說具有十分的吸引力.我是從小學五年級在一個偶然的機會下見識到棒球對我的吸引力.於是我加入了棒球隊.每天早上,必須很早來練身體.長做的就包括了跑步,伏地挺身等很多在打棒球前不可或缺的熱身.
My favorite sport is baseball. This sport seem to be very attractive to me. When I was in grade 5, in a unexpected moment, i fell how attractive it is to me. Then I joined the baseball team. I have to exercise every morning, including running, push-ups, and many different warm-ups for baseball. 這些熱身可以大幅的減少運動的傷害.而棒球最講究的就是腳力還有手力了.腳力是在跑壘時不可或缺的一項因素.你可能打的很遠,但是卻不一定跑的很快,這就造成了對方傳球的機會,即可把你封殺掉.即使你打的再遠,除非全壘打,要不然傳球的速度絕對比跑步快上好幾倍.
These warm-ups reduces sports injures. And for baseball, feet and arm muscles are important. Running to bases needs feet. You may hit the ball far, but if you don't run fast, you will get eliminate. Except in the cases where you hit homeruns, or else the speed for the ball is always faster then your feet.
每當我出去比賽時,總是會享受到打擊到對方的球的快感.看著球從二十公尺 三十公尺 五十公尺的飛阿飛,這種成就感是我對棒球一直熱衷的原因.
Whenever I go out for games, I aleays enjoy the feeling of hitting on the ball that the pitcher throws. Watch the ball fly 20, and 30, and 50 meters, this is the reason why i enjoy playing baseball.
最後,上了國中,可以練棒球的機會就少了,因為住的地方的關係.只好假日拿著棒球棍,找石頭打.石頭雖然會讓球棍壞掉,但是看著球棍上的凹洞越來越多,也挺有成就感的.
Eventually, when I got into junior high school, the chances of playing baseball has drop, because of the place I live in. So in the weekend, I use the time to play baseball with the baseball bat and little rocks. Although rocks damages my bat, but when i see the damage on the bat, I don't feel that bad after all, cause that just makes me think that everything I do is worthy.

下面是引用vic7427於2006-02-19 14:21發表的 :
好 為了表示我的誠意 請大家看一下我翻的文章My favorite sports

My favorite sports is baseball.
It’s so interesting to me.
I play baseball since I’m in elementary school .
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您自己翻的很好呀,雖然有一些些小錯誤,但表達得都不錯,簡單扼要.
您所描述的有大部分是過去發生的事,所以有很多地方要改成過去式唷!
自己寫出那麼多應該很也成就感吧!
麻煩您再做一件事,做完我很樂意改,就是再把您自己寫出的英文文章做一下上面所說的時態的調整.
但是假如您已經決定用版主的文章的話,那就不用了

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這是我修改後的一部份

My favorite sports is baseball.
It’s so interesting to me. (這具有點在重複之前的所以最好去掉,寫作文盡量減少 I’m, you’re, doesn’t,it’s …分開較好)
I have been playing baseball since elementary school .(這句最好放在下一句後面比較順)
When I first came into contact with baseball, I was unable to stop thinking about it every moment, (希望沒改掉您的意思) so I joined the school baseball team. (so 不可做開頭)